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Nowadays, some employers thought formal academic qualification are more important than life experience and personal qualities when they look for new employees. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
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 day hiring requirements are important for all occupations. So, some people think that
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academic qualification
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them
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 most
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requirements
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other
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others
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 prefer
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personal experience.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
Body paragraph 1
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one
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 hand focusing on academic
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a
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personal
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 in different
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fields
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, a
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researcher
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good academic
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he
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already
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 how to work under
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pressure
. So, that
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 people think that
,
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 academic
qualification
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qualifications
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 are
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requirements
.
Body paragraph 2
One
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 the other hand, personal
experiecne
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experience
experiences
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 enough to get a good position. To illustrate, a designer his own test and own
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experience
experiences
 are more important than deductions.
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 proves clearly why people prefer
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personal experience.
Conclusion
In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point views, I believe that both
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academic qualifications and personal experiences are important to get
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 job.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic qualifications
  • life experience
  • personal qualities
  • standardized level of knowledge
  • theoretical foundation
  • specialized fields
  • dedication
  • work ethic
  • measure and compare
  • industries
  • healthcare
  • engineering
  • legal and safety reasons
  • certifications
  • transcripts
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