The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of citizens who were prisoned in five years ending 1994 based on
genders
and the part chart demonstrates Fix the agreement mistake
gender
most
imperative cause of Add an article
the most
arresting
in seven levels.
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arrest
Overall
, the huge number of arrested people were males however
, the most common reason for taking prison was public drinking that women
were in
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at
highest
level Correct article usage
the highest
compare
with Change the form of the verb
compared
men
.
It is observed that,
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apply
according to
different genders thirty-two percent
of males were arrested Change the spelling
per cent
while
just nine percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
women
were prisoned in five years ending 1994. Moreover
, sixty-eight percent
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per cent
men
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of men
not
arrested and Add a missing verb
were not
it
is less than females who were not prisoned.
Unfortunately, Correct pronoun usage
which
the
public drinking was the most important reason of arresting which involved 30 Correct article usage
apply
percent
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per cent
men
and more than 35 Change preposition
of men
percent
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per cent
women
. In against, 15 Change preposition
of women
percent
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per cent
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of male
male
and 10 Fix the agreement mistake
males
percent
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per cent
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of female
female
were prisoned Fix the agreement mistake
females
due to
the
theft. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, when drunk persons were driving, they were arrested consists
of 15 Wrong verb form
consisting
percent
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per cent
women
and 25 percent
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per cent
men
.Change preposition
of men
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