The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows information about how much profit they get
of
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three bakeries in Calgary,
Amandine
bakery
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Bakery
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,
Mari
baker
shop
, and
Bolo
cakery
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Cakery
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between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, at the first of the
period
, the
Mari
baker
shop
,
Amandine
bakery
, and
Bolo
cakery
they
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remained the same.
However
, the
Mari
baker
shop
increased and
then
dropped
at the
end
of the
period
. The
Amandine
bakery
,
it
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remained the same over the
years
and
at the
end
of the
period
it went up. The
bolo
cakery
, at the start of the
period
it has
a
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fluctuated and
then
remained the same, after that it
increase
gradually
at the
end
of the
period
. Regarding the
Mari
baker
shop
yearly
incom
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income
, in 2000, it stood at 80000$. After two
years
, it
increase
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increases
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to nearly 85000$.
In
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2003 until 2004, it rose gradually to 87000$. There was a dropped
of
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the profit in 2005, and it fluctuated over two
years
until 2008.
At the
end
of the
period
it stood at 40000$ in 2010. In terms of the
incom
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income
of the
Bolo
cakery
, at the first of the
period
, it stood at 20000$, after
that
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it
increase
slowly in 2001.
In
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2002 until 2003, it went up to 40000$, over four
years
it remained the same until 2007. In 2008 It went up to 60000$. After
that
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it rose slowly in 2010. With regard to
Amandine
bakery
, at the start of the
period
it stood at 48000$ in 2000, it stayed the same over five
years
. In 2006, there was a sharp
increase
until 2010, it stood at nearly 110000$.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amandine, bakery, mari, baker, shop, bolo, cakery, period, end, years, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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