The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows information about how much profit they get
of
three bakeries in Calgary, Change preposition
from
Amandine
bakery
, Capitalize word
Bakery
Mari
baker
shop
, and Bolo
cakery
between 2000 and 2010. Capitalize word
Cakery
Overall
, at the first of the period
, the Mari
baker
shop
, Amandine
bakery
, and Bolo
cakery
they
remained the same. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, the Mari
baker
shop
increased and then
dropped at the
end
of the period
. The Amandine
bakery
, it
remained the same over the Correct pronoun usage
apply
years
and at the
end
of the period
it went up. The bolo
cakery
, at the start of the period
it has a
fluctuated and Correct article usage
apply
then
remained the same, after that it increase
gradually at the
end
of the period
.
Regarding the Mari
baker
shop
yearly incom
, in 2000, it stood at 80000$. After two Correct your spelling
income
years
, it increase
to nearly 85000$. Change the verb form
increases
In
2003 until 2004, it rose gradually to 87000$. There was a dropped Change preposition
From
of
the profit in 2005, and it fluctuated over two Change preposition
in
years
until 2008. At the
end
of the period
it stood at 40000$ in 2010.
In terms of the incom
of the Correct your spelling
income
Bolo
cakery
, at the first of the period
, it stood at 20000$, after that
it Add a comma
,that
increase
slowly in 2001. In
2002 until 2003, it went up to 40000$, over four Change preposition
From
years
it remained the same until 2007. In 2008 It went up to 60000$. After that
it rose slowly in 2010.
With regard to Add a comma
,that
Amandine
bakery
, at the start of the period
it stood at 48000$ in 2000, it stayed the same over five years
. In 2006, there was a sharp increase
until 2010, it stood at nearly 110000$.Submitted by Sm9312934 on
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amandine, bakery, mari, baker, shop, bolo, cakery, period, end, years, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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