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The given line graph illustrates the average number of United Kingdom passengers going each day by car, bus, or train from 1970 to 2030.

The given line graph illustrates the average number of United Kingdom passengers going each day by car, bus, or train from 1970 to 2030.
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The given line graph illustrates the average number of United Kingdom passengers going each day by
car
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,
bus
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, or
train
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 from 1970 to 2030.
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, the quantity of UK citizens commuting by
car
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 and
train
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have
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 risen throughout the period
while
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 that for the
bus
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 has witnessed a downward trend.
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,
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car
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the car
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 has been the most popular type of transportation in the UK over the period shown. In 1970, there were 5
million
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 and 2
million
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 British opted to go by
car
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 and
train
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 respectively. For the next 10 years, the number of
car
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 users was almost the same before increasing significantly to about 7
million
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 in 2000. The pattern for the
train
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 witnessed a gradual rise to 3
million
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 in the year 2000. There was
a
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apply
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stability in the data
of
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on
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car
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travelers
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travellers
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 from 2000 to 2010, after that it climbed slowly to nearly 8
million
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 in 2020 and is expected to peak at almost 9
million
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 in 2030.
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, the figure for the
train
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 stayed unchanged
to
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in
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 2010 and
then
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 rose remarkably to roughly 4
million
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 in 2020. There are
also
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 predictions that it will keep increasing and reach a peak of nearly 5
million
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. Regarding the
Bus
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, in 1970, about 4
million
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 people in the UK
traveled
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travelled
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 by
bus
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.
Bus
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 commuters decreased moderately to approximately 3.5
million
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 in 2000 and continually fell to over 3
million
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 in 2020. The
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bus
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number of bus
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 users are foreseen to decline and hit the lowest point at 3
million
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 in 2030.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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