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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydrolelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydrolelectric power station.
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The given diagram
illustrate
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 the process of
Hydroelectric
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a Hydroelectric
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power
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station
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. Where it includes multiple stages of the process from the
river
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 to
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power
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the power
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station
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 which includes
day
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 and night
procedure
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procedures
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.
At
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In
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 the
begainning
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beginning
river
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 was
controled
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controlled
 by setting up a
dam
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. Under the
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river
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,river
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 there was
high-level
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a high-level
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 reservoir. On
day
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 time
dam
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 was
open
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opened
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 to complete the method.
However
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,
in
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at
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the
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apply
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night
dam
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 gate was closed. When
gate
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the gate
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 of the
dam
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 was open it create electricity in the
river
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,
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apply
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 and
take
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takes
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 the water to
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power
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the power
a power
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station
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. Where through the generator machine creates electricity and
through
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apply
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the
power
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 line current supply to
national
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the national
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 grid.
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, in the evening, the system of production was different. There was a low-level reservoir inside the
power
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station
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. From where on the night reversible turbines pump the water into
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a higer
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higer
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higher
 level reservoir,
thus
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flew
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flying
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 to the
river
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 under the
dam
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 gate.
Whereas
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this
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 turbine during the
day
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 works differently. It operates
generator
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a generator
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on
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in
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 the
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day time
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daytime
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, river, day, dam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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