Behaviour in schools is getting worse. Explain the causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

The
behavior
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of the
students
getting worse and
this
causes a bad
problem
for the
students
and the
school
. Some of the causes of
this
problem
are, there are no clear
rules
in the
school
, so that let the
students
do
a
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bad behavior.
Also
, the
teach
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of the
teachers
is not good, some of the
teachers
are not teaching well and they don't behave
good
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well
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with the
students
so that let the
students
don't respect the
teachers
. There is no oversight for the
students
and the
teachers
, so that
give
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them the freedom to do whatever they want. There are no consequences
to
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the
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students
who
are not behave
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are not behaving
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well. All of these effects let the
students
not
behaving
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behave
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well and
also
it
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affect
for
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apply
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their
personality
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so
its
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it's
it is
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a big
problem
for the
students
. There are some solutions
for
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these problems. The
school
should do a monthly questionnaire for the
students
and the
teachers
. The questionnaire for the
students
will ask them how the
teachers
are
behave
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behaving
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with them and how is their teaching, for the
teachers
it will ask about how
is
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are
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the levels of the
students
and how they are behaving.
Also
making
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make
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a clear
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clear rules
a clear rule
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rules
in the
school
so the
students
can behave well and if any of them broke any of the
rules
they will have a consequence because of broking the
rules
. These are the best solutions
can
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that can
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let the
students
behave well. In conclusion, a lot of
students
are behaving very
bad
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badly
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in
school
, because there are no clear
rules
and there is no oversight of the
students
, but there are some solutions
may
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that may
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help to solve
this
problem
, to check and make a qusonnarie for the
students
and the
teachers
to see how they behaving and making consequences for the
students
who broke the
rules
.
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