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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, being rich and helping
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 is becoming increasingly popular among
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. There could be several reasons for
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 and I consider it to be a very positive trend.
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, wealthy
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 can help disabled persons and they can give money and other need things to orphanages. They can donate who need assistance. All
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 are happy and they can give what they want things. Rich
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 always should be honest and generous. A wealthy human is a strong person from the financial side. Helping unable persons is vitally important.
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, there are rich and mean
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 too. They want only to become wealthy themselves. They think only of their home, family, and company and belonging to themselves. And they spend their money travelling over the world. They don't remember disabled
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. Only money is vitally important for them. If they have a problem. They solve with wealth. But because of many trials, they achieve their goals.
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 activities help
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 to be satisfied with themselves and prove that their hard work does pay off.
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, I would argue that the most thing is to help disabled persons.
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 being rich and give enjoy life others to need enjoy their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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