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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons.Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion

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 boarding school is
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 object for parents . Affirmative people resolve that they are two reasons for their decision the least.
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 parents believe that youngsters in
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boarding school
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 the less play truant because education authorities always guard
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them.
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schools
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other type
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 of
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 because teachers pay attention to pupils 24 hours. Again beside
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 educational environments until education activities be effective.
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 of learning in boarding
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 equal with the private
schools
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not
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 necessary really. In conclusion, it seems that the parents are like the child growing
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family
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of
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