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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of the
population
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 aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in the
USA
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,
Sweden
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, and Japan.
Overall
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, all three countries experienced an upward trend during the specified period. Among these countries, Japan is expected to have a rapid increase towards the end of the period. In the
USA
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 and
Sweden
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, the proportion of the
population
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 aged 65 and over followed a similar pattern. Starting at just below 10% in the
USA
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 and 7% in
Sweden
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 in 1940, the figures gradually increased. By 1980, both countries reached around 15% of the
population
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 aged 65 and over. In the
USA
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, the percentage remained stable until 2020 but saw a dramatic growth to about 22% in 2040.
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,
Sweden
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 experienced a steady rise to 15% in 1980, surpassing the
USA
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 in that year.
On the other hand
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, Japan consistently saw an increase in the percentage from 5% in 1940 to 10% in 2030.
However
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, it is projected to have a sharp surge to 27% in 2040, surpassing both the
USA
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 and
Sweden
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 and becoming the country with the highest proportion of the
population
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 aged 65 and over.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, usa, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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