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The tendency of human beings copying each other is shown in popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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Fashion is the core part of
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 lifestyle. The main factor of
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 brands, famous celebrities using
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fasionable
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fashionable
cloths
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clothes
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 and tangible commodities.
Popularity
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The popularity
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 of fashion
clothes
 and consumer goods, these things has the tendency
of
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for
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 human beings
copying
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 each other as visible.
In
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extend
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,
fashion
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fashionable
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clothes
 are more or like, the more fashionable you are, he or she will be
apreciated
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appreciated
for their dressing sense. In a recent survey done by most of
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 brands, they came up with an outcome, the people try to
ware
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wear
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clothes
 which were
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 by the
celebreities
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celebrities
. People love to wear the brand
clothes
 similar to famous actor, as they want to look
a like
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alike
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 as they are.
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on the other hand
, wearing
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similarly
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simiraly
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similar
kind
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 of
clothes
 doesn't look
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