The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Science
brings mountains and oceans of benefits to our daily
lives
. To exalt
people
's living
standard
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seems to play the most significant part of scientific
research
. Personally,
while
there are other important targets of
science
, I agree that
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people
's living levels is in a superior position. On the one hand, I accept that other purposes of
research
and development do play a pivotal role.
For example
, several scientists only
research
for
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what they are obsessed with.
Additionally
, some scientific
researches
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are aimed to perfect the theory and technology, not to lift
people
's comfort.
Besides
,
science
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of future development,
such
as astronomic exploration and environmental biologist, empowers
people
to master
further
skills to encounter future
challenge
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challenges
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. Without these aspects, we may not experience
to
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today’s good
lives
.
On the other hand
, it is the thought of advancing our
lives
that takes the most necessary position in
science
. If our aim is not to move up our condition, our society would not have upliftment,
while
science
would not get
a
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huge progress.
That we
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wish and
eager
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to improve our
lives
create
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an atmosphere of keeping researching and
developing
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constantly in our society. And
people
show their joint effort to engage in
science
which
is
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also
aim
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at elevating their
lives
. In conclusion,
while
I admit that other purpose of scientific
research
is important, I would argue that the eagerness of creating a better life is in the most crucial position of
science
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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