The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
The line chart illustrates the median about 130 to 350
number
of weekly patients
who visited different four clinic
namely, Change to a plural noun
clinics
birth
control
, eye
, and
diabetic and dental of one specific Correct word choice
apply
hosptial
over 6 years.
Correct your spelling
hospital
Overall
, it is clear the birth
control
and eye
clinic
was
Verb problem
had
highest
Change the article
the highest
number
of patients
, while
the diabetic and dental was
the lowest. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Furthermore
, eye
,diabetic, and dental showed upward
trend, Add an article
an upward
whereas
the
Correct article usage
apply
birth
control
showed Correct article usage
a fluctuated
fluctuated
. Replace the word
fluctuation
Additionally
, some clinics reach ,peak, lowest, unchanged at certain
Add an article
a certain
year
.
Regarding Fix the agreement mistake
years
birth
control
and eye
, from 2010 to middle
of 2012 Correct article usage
the middle
birth
control
clinic
was
received the highest Unnecessary verb
apply
number
of patients
and in 2012 reach
Wrong verb form
reached
apex
at almost 280 Correct pronoun usage
its apex
patients
, and in center of 2012 the
both Remove the article
apply
birth
control
and eye
clinicis had the same number
of patients
approximately 215 patients
and the birth
control
reached the lowest point in 2014 was 180 patients
. In contrast
, the
from 2010 to the end of Correct article usage
apply
given
period the Add an article
the given
eye
clinic
showed dramatically increased
Replace the word
a dramatic increase
Change preposition
of
patients
and from 2014 to 2016 was
the received the highest Unnecessary verb
apply
number
of patients
compared to other clinics.
In terms of others
clinics, dental reached the lowest point in 2012 around 53 Correct quantifier usage
other
patients
and then
showed raised
. In comparison, the diabetic Replace the word
a rise
clinic
went up from 2010 to 2012 , and then
from 2012 to 2014 stil
unaltered at Correct your spelling
still
number
of around 90 Change the article
a number
the number
patients
, and after that showed upward
trend.Add an article
an upward
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, patients, clinic, birth, control, eye with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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