The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
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The line chart illustrates the median
number
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of weekly
patients
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who visited different four
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clinic
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clinics
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namely,
birth
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control
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,
eye
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,
and
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apply
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diabetic and dental of one specific
hosptial
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hospital
over 6 years.
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, it is clear the
birth
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control
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and
eye
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clinic
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was
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had
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highest
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the highest
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number
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of
patients
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,
while
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the diabetic and dental
was
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were
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the lowest.
Furthermore
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,
eye
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,diabetic, and dental showed
upward
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an upward
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trend,
whereas
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the
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apply
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birth
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control
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showed
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a fluctuated
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fluctuated
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.
Additionally
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, some clinics reach ,peak, lowest, unchanged at
certain
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a certain
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year
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years
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. Regarding
birth
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control
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and
eye
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, from 2010 to
middle
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the middle
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of 2012
birth
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control
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clinic
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was
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apply
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received the highest
number
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of
patients
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and in 2012
reach
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reached
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apex
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its apex
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at almost 280
patients
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, and in center of 2012
the
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apply
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both
birth
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control
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and
eye
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clinicis had the same
number
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of
patients
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approximately 215
patients
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and the
birth
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control
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reached the lowest point in 2014 was 180
patients
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.
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,
the
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apply
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from 2010 to the end of
given
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the given
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period the
eye
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clinic
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showed
dramatically increased
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a dramatic increase
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of
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about 130 to 350
patients
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and from 2014 to 2016
was
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apply
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the received the highest
number
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of
patients
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compared to other clinics. In terms of
others
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other
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clinics, dental reached the lowest point in 2012 around 53
patients
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and
then
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showed
raised
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a rise
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. In comparison, the diabetic
clinic
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went up from 2010 to 2012 , and
then
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from 2012 to 2014
stil
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still
unaltered at
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number
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a number
the number
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of around 90
patients
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, and after that showed
upward
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an upward
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trend.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, patients, clinic, birth, control, eye with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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