People living in big cities face several problems. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller town?

It is believed that dwellers these days have to
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many troubles in their daily life ,
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as financial
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, lack of accommodation or traffic
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..... And will be elaborate below . From my point of view ,
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think the government should encourage their citizen to move to smaller
resional
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regional
towns . Begin with the first problem
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dwellers is the lack of accommodation. When too many
people
live in the big city , there will be not enough places for all
people
to live in , especially the
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citizen or the unemployed .
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, there are many
apartment
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for
people
to rent but the price to move in is too
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.
As a
result
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they have to live in the
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slums
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the
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trash and bacteria
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everywhere, the
slumpt
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slump
slumped
also
an ideal place for
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a criminal
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criminal
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to avoid
police
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so
people
won't be safe if they live
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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