some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays people are spoiled with too many
choices
, some believe it
whereas
others argue it isn’t .
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my opinion , I believe that we have too many
choices
in our life.
Such
as
food
, dress , education , transport and many more. It gives us more benefits and some drawbacks too.
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discuss
about
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it
further
. First of all , when we look at
food
,
earlier
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days we had very limited restaurants and hotels to have it.
Although
, nowadays we could find
enormous
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amount of new
food
stalls everywhere.
For instance
,
currently
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people are opening
food
trucks rather than restaurants. We could see
food
trucks everywhere
such
as near beaches or very crowded places near sports
club
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clubs
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or colleges.
Furthermore
, folks are confused in choosing which place to go or what to eat.
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spoiled with too many
choices
.
However
, there are some drawbacks for the age-old restaurant owners , when new entrepreneurs promote they face problems.
On the other hand
, inhabitants have too many
choices
for
education wise
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.
Such
as so many new private schools , colleges ,
pre schools
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, universities and other private classes can be seen everywhere. Nowadays student
get
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too many
choices
and they distract from what they want to do and study.
For instance
, when a pupil wants to study a particular course but the college offers them too many options by doing
this
they get
distract
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and might choose
a
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wrong course for them.
However
, there could be a benefit for them as well . In conclusion , I think too many
choices
nowadays could spoil the
populations
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,
however
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it has some benefits too. I strongly believe it
is totally depends
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on the individuals as I could agree
and
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or
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disagree with
this
notion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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