some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays people are spoiled with too many

choices

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, some believe it

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others argue it isn’t .

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my opinion , I believe that we have too many

choices

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in our life.

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food

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, dress , education , transport and many more. It gives us more benefits and some drawbacks too.

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discuss

about

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further

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. First of all , when we look at

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earlier

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days we had very limited restaurants and hotels to have it.

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, nowadays we could find

enormous

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amount of new

food

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stalls everywhere.

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currently

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people are opening

food

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trucks rather than restaurants. We could see

food

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trucks everywhere

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as near beaches or very crowded places near sports

club

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or colleges.

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, folks are confused in choosing which place to go or what to eat.

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spoiled with too many

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, there are some drawbacks for the age-old restaurant owners , when new entrepreneurs promote they face problems.

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, inhabitants have too many

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for

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as so many new private schools , colleges ,

pre schools

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pre-schools

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, universities and other private classes can be seen everywhere. Nowadays student

get

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too many

choices

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and they distract from what they want to do and study.

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, when a pupil wants to study a particular course but the college offers them too many options by doing

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they get

distract

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and might choose

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wrong course for them.

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, there could be a benefit for them as well . In conclusion , I think too many

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nowadays could spoil the

populations

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however

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it has some benefits too. I strongly believe it

is totally depends

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on the individuals as I could agree

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disagree with

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notion.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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