The diagram shows the process by which milk and related product are produced

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related product are produced
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The illustration below depicts how
milk
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is produced at dairy farms and distributed in different forms for consumption.
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, it is a 6-stage man-made, linear process which begins with
collection
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the collection
a collection
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of
milk
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from cows in dairy farms and
finally
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results in distributing it in supermarkets and shops.
To begin
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with, cows are allowed to graze on farms before collecting
milk
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from them twice a day using a milking machine. The
milk
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collected is
then
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kept in a
refrigator
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refrigerator
for storage.
Following
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this
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, it
delivered
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to dairies through
milk
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tankers, which are sent on
daily
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a daily
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basis. After reaching the dairy, the
milk
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is stored in tankers where it is either pasteurized before packing it for delivery to supermarkets and shops
,
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apply
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or
procesed
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processed
proceed
in order to produce
milk
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products
such
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as cream, cheese and butter.
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