The diagram shows the process by which milk and related product are produced

The illustration below depicts how

milk

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is produced at dairy farms and distributed in different forms for consumption.

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, it is a 6-stage man-made, linear process which begins with

collection

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the collection

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milk

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from cows in dairy farms and

finally

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results in distributing it in supermarkets and shops.

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with, cows are allowed to graze on farms before collecting

milk

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from them twice a day using a milking machine. The

milk

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collected is

then

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kept in a

refrigator

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refrigerator

for storage.

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this

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, it

delivered

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to dairies through

milk

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tankers, which are sent on

daily

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a daily

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basis. After reaching the dairy, the

milk

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is stored in tankers where it is either pasteurized before packing it for delivery to supermarkets and shops

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procesed

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processed

proceed

in order to produce

milk

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products

such

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as cream, cheese and butter.

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Jul 4, 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

133 words

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