The diagram shows the process by which milk and related product are produced
The illustration below depicts how
milk
is produced at dairy farms and distributed in different forms for consumption.
Overall
, it is a 6-stage man-made, linear process which begins with collection
of Add an article
the collection
a collection
milk
from cows in dairy farms and finally
results in distributing it in supermarkets and shops.
To begin
with, cows are allowed to graze on farms before collecting milk
from them twice a day using a milking machine. The milk
collected is then
kept in a refrigator
for storage. Correct your spelling
refrigerator
Following
this
, it delivered
to dairies through Add a missing verb
is delivered
milk
tankers, which are sent on daily
basis.
After reaching the dairy, the Correct article usage
a daily
milk
is stored in tankers where it is either pasteurized before packing it for delivery to supermarkets and shops,
or Remove the comma
apply
procesed
in order to produce Correct your spelling
processed
proceed
milk
products such
as cream, cheese and butter.Submitted by ravleenkaurchawla on
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