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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say that the government should take responsibility for planting trees while others opine that it is the responsibility of the citizens to plant trees in their houses. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Reforestation
 is extremely necessary for the ecosystem. Some
individuals
 think that the authorities should take
responsibility
 for planting
trees
whereas
 others feel that it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of the
citizens
 to plant
trees
 in their homes. In my opinion, the lawmakers should only
responsible
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be responsible
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 for
reforestation
. On the one hand, some think planting
trees
 is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of
citizens
instead
 of
governments
. They believe
the
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that
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individuals
 should make positive things
through
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by
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plantting
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planting
trees
 in their accommodations in order to reduce Co2 emissions.
This
 is because the most of greenhouse result
of
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from
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using
people
 for their vehicles.
Furthermore
, if
the
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apply
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plantting
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planting
trees
 become
responsibility
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a responsibility
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for
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of
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individuals
,
this
 step can raise
awarenss
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awareness
 among
people
 about environmental issues
such
 as
,
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apply
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deforetation
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deforestation
, pollution,
climate
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and climate
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 change.
On the other hand
, I would like to agree with those who believe
the
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that
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reforestation
 is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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for
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of
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governments
 rather than
citizens
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the citizens
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. To being with, platting
trees
 is expensive for
individuals
people
.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that
,
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apply
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trees
 need water and better soil and maybe
chemcial
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chemical
 substances, which
this
 factors can upset the budget of the public.
In contrast
, the
goverments
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governments
government
 earn taxes from
citizens
.
Consequently
, the
governments
 should use
this
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these
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 funds for
reforestation
.
Moreover
, if the
governments
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government
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funding
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funds
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 the
platting
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planting
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trees
 can save a considerable amount of money in
long-trem
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long-term
.
This
 is because
the
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apply
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most
of
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serious
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the serious
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 diseases namely, cancer,
asthma
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and asthma
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 result
of
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from
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 air pollution, and
then
 platting
trees
 play a significant role to absorb
Co2
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the Co2
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 footprint from the
atomsphere
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atmosphere
.
Therefore
,
the
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apply
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governments
 can prevent their
citizens
 to get diseases
as well as
 reduce the pressure
in
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on
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healthcare
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the healthcare
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 system.
To sum up
, In my perspective, the
governments
 should only
responsible
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be responsible
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about
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for
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plantting
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planting
trees
, because
it
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they
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 earn taxes
via
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from
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people
, and
it
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they
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 can save
public
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the public
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 budget to cure
people
 from serious
dieases
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diseases
such
 as
,
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apply
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 cancer ,
asthma
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and asthma
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 .
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