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A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
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As the world's population is growing it is getting vitally important to solve the
energy
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 problem and a number of companies are investing in searching for new
oil
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 sources.
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,
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 source of
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 cannot be restored.
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, there is an opinion, that it might be worthwhile to fund sustainable
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 sources,wind and
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,
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. I am inclined to agree with
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 point of view since green
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 will not run out and ,
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, it has no greenhouse gas emissions and
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Oil
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 deposits have been forming for millions of years,
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 they cannot be refilled quickly.
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, wind and solar
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 have no limits.
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, developing the green
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 industry might have more benefits in the long term future and might help to avoid an
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 crisis, when the planet will run out of non-renewable resources.
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,if all
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 mines will be closed, the full transition to renewable
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 would be easier if its production will be well developed,
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 it needs investments now.
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, renewable
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 production has no negative impact on the environment
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 the fact that wind and solar
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 stations do not produce greenhouse gas emissions.
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, switching to green
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 might help to avoid
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 negative consequences as climate change by trapping heat, and
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 respiratory diseases from smog and air pollution.It means that developing green
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 production now
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 will benefit our planet in the future. In conclusion,
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 society is still attempting to find new
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 sources, it is obvious that they are
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 be empty soon.
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 reason, I fully agree that the renewable
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 industry is worth more investments now.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • finite
  • renewable energy sources
  • expenditure
  • compromise
  • sustainable
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructure
  • economic sustainability
  • dependency
  • fluctuating prices
  • stimulate
  • job creation
  • vested interests
  • transition
  • reluctance
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