Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a organization.What might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed.

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There has been ongoing debate regarding the topic of
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.
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some individuals prefer to
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for a
company
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, others believe to open their own
business
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. In
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essay, I will discuss the reasons behind
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phenomenon and
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mention the drawbacks of being
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. At the outset, there are several causes why
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a group
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of people want to start their own
company
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, but the most prominent one lies in the fact that it gives freedom and flexibility to them.
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, it would give them
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to take a decision without any restriction and they can
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work
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according
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their own schedule. At present, no one likes to get
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orders from any other person. Apart from that, being
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an entreprenuer
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entreprenuer
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entrepreneur
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trending in the world. By
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this
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I mean that
,
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people have a mindset that if they
work
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in a
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company
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hard
work
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then
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it would be
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benefical
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beneficial
to the
company
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not for them. They would only get
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fixed monthly salary
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a profit.
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, there are
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few
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drawbacks
of
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having own organization.
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, in the job employee get paid every month whether
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company
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the company
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is making
profit
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a profit
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or loss. In
case
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of business,
owner
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is getting paid or not it depends on the
company
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whether it is making
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a profit
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or loss.
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, having a ownership of
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sometimes
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affect
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the
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health as well. Since there are various kinds of
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in a business,
person
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people
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would be in stress and
anxiety
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which is harmful
for
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their mental and physical health. From what has been discussed above, it can be concluded that flexibility and freedom are the main reasons for
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to open
thier
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their
own startup.
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, it has few
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negatives
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as it is not only risky but
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detrimental
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the
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health as well.
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