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computer games and films containing violence are popular today. since people think, that these are harmful for our society and the government shiuld ban them. others argue that such games and films are fine for entertainment. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 modern era, humans have got
alot
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a lot
 of ways to entertain themselves and technology is one of them.
According to
 some
people
, computer
games
 and films that
includes
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include
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 violence should be
baned
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banned
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 by the government as they are harmful
for
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to
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the
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society
while
 others believe that it is good entertainment. Before commenting on my decision we should discuss both the
view point
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viewpoint
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. At
first,
few
people
 believe that
games
 and films are fine for entertainment. Since everyone is working around the clock, so they want to entertain themselves by
siting
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sitting
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 at home watching action
movies
 and playing
games
 rather than going outside.
In addition
 to that going out
entertainment
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for entertainment
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 cause money, which is
also
 another reason. On the other side, some
people
 want
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 to ban
violence
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violent
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movies
 and
games
 as it has
alot
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a lot
 of negative
impact
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impacts
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 on adults and children
specially
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especially
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.
voilent
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violent
movies
 give
people
 ideas for robbery,
shoting
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shooting
shouting
 and hitting.
People
 get distracted from good things.
This
 way there are more chances for
voilence
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violence
 in
society
 as
people
 start following the movie starts,
Furthermore
,
vedio
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video
games
 can take
alot
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a lot
 of
persons
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person
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 time and distract them from
outside
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the outside
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 world.
To conclude
, in my opinion
government
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the government
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 should ban action
movies
 and violent
games
 that
ruines
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ruin
the
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apply
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society
. If
government
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the government
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 will ban
such
movies
, the producer will come up with something more
knowkedgable
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knowledgeable
knowledgable
 and which will
also
 have
positive
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a positive
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efffect
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effect
effects
 on
society
.
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