The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph represents the detail about the count of
males
and females who did study in two different times in three distinct years.
Overall
,it can be clearly seen that the
students
of full-
time
education
were more than part-
time
in all the years in both genders. As can be seen in the chart ,
in
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from
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1970 to 1971 the
number
of
males
were
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was
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highest in
full
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full-time
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time
education
which calculate near
by
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apply
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1000
whereas
the part-
time
students
were less than 200. In
next
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the next
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two given
year
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years
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the
number
of male
students
slightly reduced which noticed near
by
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apply
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800 in full-
time
education
and
part-
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part-time
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time
males
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male
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students
was roughly 200.
While
,
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the
number
of
males
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male
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students
were above than 800 and 200 in full and part-
time
education
orderly.  Probing
further
, the female
number
was
approxmately
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approximately
700 in
full
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full-time
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time
education
and less than 100 from 1970 to 1971 . The count of girls was almost 800 in full-
time
education
which was 4
time
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times
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less in
part
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part-time
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time
education
in
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from
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the
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apply
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1970 to 1971 .
Moreover
, the maximum count of women
study
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studying
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in full-
time
education
which
oberved
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observed
more than 1000 and properly 200 in part-
time
.
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