The line graph shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meats in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

The line graph shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meats in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
The line graph illustrated
fish
and meat consumption per
week
in a European country.
Overall
,
fish
ingestion every
week
has always been
on
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the
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lowest since 1979 until 2004.
Additionally
, beef is the most popular amongst the
europeans
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in 1979 which marks the most ingested in a
week
for a single person of 220
grams
. Looking at the details, lamb and chicken
was
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eaten 150
grams
and 140
grams
respectively weekly by an individual in 1979,
although
lamb will see a decrease in trend and eventually reached a bottom of 60
grams
a
week
while
chicken continues to climb and hit the highest in the graph at 240 at the year 2004. Now turning to beef and
fish
, we can see that beef was the most popular meat in 1979 will start declining in 1987 and at
last
fall
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to 110
grams
in one
week
coming in second as the choice of meat by europe people in 2004,
while
fish
have always been the least favourite food since 1979 starting at 51
grams
and come to only 49
grams
of
fish
weekly in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, week, grams with synonyms.
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