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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a
museum
 in 1990 and in 2010 The two plans show changes to a ground floor of a
museum
 from 1990 to 2010. The most striking alteration was to the right part of the
museum
, where a Children”s interactive zone and a Poster display area
was
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 constructed, where there was
on
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an
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 Archaeology gallery. It is
also
 noticeable that the entrance was
expended
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, which was almost doubled in size. Another room that
wos
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was
changett
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change
changed
 was the Gift Shop, where was build a Cafe.
Due to
this
 the place of the statue had to be changed
,
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 and was placed in the
center
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 of the
museum
, so everyone could see it. Another important change is that a lift was added between the Caffe and Gift Shop and the Natural history room, so even elderly people and disabled
person
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people
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 could enjoy history. At the
some
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same
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 time, we can see that
Museum
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the Museum
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 office was not affected by the renovation and remained the same, and the Local history room
which
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was just a little changed. Taken as a whole, the Ground floor of
museum
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 has undergone a number of major alterations between 1990 and 2010.
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