Some people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals think that when they have problems at work and
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they don’t need to do anything with that,
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others strongly believe that it is better to change that situation and improve it. That type of
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not try to do anything just
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not believe that it is possible. It can be for some reasons
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as being lazy or it’s their comfort zone. They don’t want to change something
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for them it is convenient to stay in that bad situation. They think that if they will accept it, everything will be improved by accident. Turning to the second group of people, they understand that to be
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they need to be
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. If they do not like their job or
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of money they will do everything
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can they
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to make it better.
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, when young people
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to work no one will give them
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a well-payment
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job. At
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time they can work for a few months and try to find
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job or get
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to be a better worker. In my point of view, it’s better to try to do something to improve
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, even if I will fail
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that it is always possible to come back.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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