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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The maps describe a public
park
 before and after some developments from 1920 to now.
Overall
, the
park
 has been totally modernized in a number of different ways. It is notable that the water feature has been built on the bottom right-hand corner and replaced the glasshouse.
Additionally
, the rose garden has been located in the middle of the
park
, which was the fountain’s location in 1920.
Furthermore
, the stage for musicians in the past has been replaced by the amphitheatre for concerts. Compared to Grange
Park
 in 1920,
due to
 the large space of the amphitheatre, the rose garden and the water feature, the empty space has been much smaller than before. Over 100 years, the facilities in the
park
 have been replaced by some modern buildings
such
 as the children’s play area, and the café.
Moreover
, when the
park
 in 1920 had two entrances, now it has three entrances including the same two in the past and the underground car
park
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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