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fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world. However, people are encourge to use energy source, such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Non-renewable
sources
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 are used since ancient times for many activities
such
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 as the production of electricity, fuel, and many more, but these
sources
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 are hard to generate if they are used up. That's why some masses are motivated to use those
sources
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 which can be replaced and renewed
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 the many advantages
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 as cost-effectiveness and ease of renewal.
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, I believe that it is a positive aspect. The first reason behind my phenomenon is cost-effectiveness. Wind and Solar
energy
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 both are natural
sources
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. They do not need to store for many
years
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, no cost of production is used to generate these which means citizens can save money. Another reason is renewable nature. These
sources
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 exist in your ecosystem for thousands of
years
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, and as compared to coal, oil and nuclear
energy
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 their supply is finite but Air, Solar
energy
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, and hydropower they are infinite.
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, the future depends upon nature,
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 helpful for employment opportunities.
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, In Germany, the government is going to set up a nuclear power plant, which results in more job vacancies in the economy and they are claiming to hire 30,000 people in a few
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.
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, wind
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 and solar power do not cause pollution
on the other hand
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, the production of coal, fuel, and diesel has many hazardous effects on animals and humans when they are burnt and stored for a longer period of time.
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,
according to
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 a report by Environment India, If people stop using fossil fuels in upcoming
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 it will help to reduce global emissions by up to 70% by 2050,
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, climate changes, loss of biodiversity, and weather conditions will be better.
To sum up
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, non-renewable
sources
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 are used for a longer period of time and help the economy in various developments, but
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 me the masses should depend on natural
energy
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 if they want to save the environment and cost
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 if they are sustainable.
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