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One of the major problems that faces today's government is creating enough satisfactory housing for their increasing population whilst still trying to protect the environment.

#government #population #whilst #environment
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
construction
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the construction
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 of accommodations, which will be fully likeable by society and keep the prosperous state of
environment
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the environment
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. It is undeniable that urbanization is an essential factor of
nation's
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developing
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.
However
, there is no absolute agreement about
this
 statement. A commonly held belief is that
with
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 creating new housing or buildings generally, nature is deteriorating. As evidence of
this
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 they point to that for
constructing
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, people ought to cut down trees, which, undoubtedly, contributes to worsening the quality of air.
Furthermore
, it influenced on population's health and their breathing system. It could be explained by the fact that it is
well known
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 how plants and forests clean the air, by absorbing carbon dioxide and releasing oxygen,
accordingly
, deforestation leads to a decrease in air purification.
On the other hand
,
building
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the building
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 of abundance housing gives
community
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the community
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a great deal of
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a lot of
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 opportunities and possibilities for
developing
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 in metropolitan areas.
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, thanks to
this
 people from
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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 can get out into a better life, where they may find an excellent occupation and corresponding salary and have quality health care. Eventually, it may be the solution
of
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mostly
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most
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 global problems. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would argue that it has both sides with as beneficial, as adverse consequences,
consequently
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 it is necessary to find the balance in order to don't damage anyone or anything.
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