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In their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative developement?

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It is a common belief that manufacturers usually focus on the new features of
thier
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their
the
 product in terms of advertising. Since advertising is one of
powerful
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 strategies to appeal
consumers
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to consumers
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 to buy
products
, I
personly
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 agree with
this
 trend.
To begin
 with, making revenue is the first goal of all
cooperations
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 in the capital society. To achieve
this
 goal, manufacturers should make good
products
 in the first place and
also
 introduce them effectively to
people
 who
willing
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 to pay. It is evident that
brandnew
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brand new
brand-new
 things are easy to catch potential
consumers
' eyes and make
people
to
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buy the
products
.
For
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consumers'
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 side,
people
 tend to delve into the product before buying things they need. It is true that advertisement is the best way for
people
 to collect information in a short time.
Consumers
 can recognize what is new in those
products
 easily and it helps them to make choices properly.
To sum up
, emphasising new things about the product in
advertisement
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the advertisement
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 is
effetive
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effective
to
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for
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 both companies and
consumers
. Customers can get useful information and Businesses can earn profit.
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