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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it Write at least 150 words.

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Dear
Mr.
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 George, My name is Georgia Henry, working as a Financial Manager, in
Etobicoke
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the Etobicoke
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 branch of your company. Today I have been writing to request you to migrate me to the main office of our company for a half year. To
intiate
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 with, I want to gain some experience
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working
in
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there, to understand the approval paycheck procedures.
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,
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 the past few weeks,
me
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 and my
colleauges
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colleagues
 are
encountring
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encountering
 with
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huge
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differences
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 in the statement, it could assist me to get
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 the problem. In the
mean time
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, I would handle the issues of
this
 location with
regualr
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regular
 meetings with my
team mates
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 and keep on updating you as well. As
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a pervious
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pervious
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 year, I was taking care of all the invoices from my home and it had not created any
problem
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. I hope you would agree with my decision as well, I require your assistance in doing some
booking
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 for me. Please do arrange my meeting with
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 from that place, and let them know about my visit. Hope you
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will
 take care of it and I request you to contact me any time for
further
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 sincerely, Georgia Henry.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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