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Nowadays, the traditions and customs of the food we eat and the way we eat it are changing what is the way they have change and what do you think about the change.

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Nowadays, the style and ways of
food
 we eat and cook are changing. in
this
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about
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that how they are changing and
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 my opinion
about
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 all that changes. First of
all
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 world is getting fast with technology and innovation, similar is the case with every aspect of life. About eating and cooking there are so many innovative and different ideas which people have adapted to their eating and cooking.
Furthermore
, in
this
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paragraph
 we will discuss
wether
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whether
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 these styles are
advantangeous
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advantageous
 for
all
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 or not, about any benefit if we talk about
the
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fast
food
its
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 actually destroying bodies
specially
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 kids and youngsters
becase
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because
there
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their
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 fast
food
 intake ratio is higher than
adults
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for adults
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 as in schools colleges or
univerisities
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universities
.
In
addition
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 cooking
food
 professionals had introduced
variety
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a variety
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 of innovative ideas to
cook
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cooking
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 the same thing in minimum
hunderd
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hundred
 different styles . not only today
infact
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in fact
this
 change will
going
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 to happen in future ever.
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 if we talk about conclusion
food
 styles and
tradition
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traditions
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 are changing day by day and will
remaine
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remain
 bringing creativity and style variety to our environment .
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