Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?
Some individuals say that in all
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levels
education
system, from elementary schools to tertiary Add an article
the education
education
, students
spends
too much time on learning academic Change the verb form
spend
facts
and not sufficient on learning practical skills
. I totally agree with this
statement, and I believe this
trend can have a negative impacts
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a negative impact
negative impacts
in
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on
personal
and professional lives of Correct article usage
the personal
students
.
To begin
with , there are several reasons why I believe that teaching students
in all levels of education
more theoretical facts
than practical skills
can have detrimetal
consequences on the Correct your spelling
detrimental
students
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students'
live
. Regarding personal Replace the word
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is extremely substantial for Replace the word
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education
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the education
skills
namely, public speaking, communication, solving
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and solving
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students
academic facts
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physics
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and physics
This
is because these practical skills
can contribute to enhance
the confidence among Wrong verb form
enhancing
students
and prepare them for real live
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life
For example
, public speaking allows students
to share their ideas around the world,
and helps them to become more Remove the comma
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confidence
.
In terms of professional Replace the word
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companies prefer applicants who have real experiences rather Change preposition
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academic
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than academic
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the fact the
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that
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tranining
new employees to gain real experience. Correct your spelling
training
As a result
, the curriculum in levels of education
should focus teach students
enough real experience instead
of concentrat
only on academic Correct your spelling
concentrating
concentrate
facts
. For example
, schools and universities should make contracts with many private organizations namely, Apple, General Electric, Amazon
in order to Correct word choice
and Amazon
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students
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in real
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sells
.
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To sum up
, I strongly believe, all levels of education
only foucs
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focus
in
academic Change preposition
on
facts
and do not enough
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have enough
of
practical Change preposition
apply
skills
, I think this
trend can have harmful effects in
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on
in
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apply
students
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