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The given line chart illustrates the number of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.

The given line chart illustrates the number of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.
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The line graph displays
quantity
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 of people using transport every day in the UK by using
car
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a car
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, bus or
train
 in
a
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the
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 period of 1970 to 2030. Notably, car and
train
 users have been rising steadily in four decades and the plan for the next 20
years
 will remain
increasingly
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increasing
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.
In contrast
,
to commute
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commuting
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 using
train
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trains
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 reduced slightly in 40
years
also
 users will decrease
until
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by
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 2030. Between the
years
 1970 to 2010
to commute
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commuting
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 by car has been grown
in
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by
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 approximately 2
millions
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million
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 (5 to 7
millions
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million
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) and the estimate for the next 20
years
 (2010 to 2010) will be 9
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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user
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users
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 provided that to growth additional
of
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apply
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3
millions
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million
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 cars
at
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on
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 the streets daily.
Moreover
,
train
 customers have been rising
1
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by 1
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million (2 to 3
millions
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million
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) in 40
years
 (1970 to 2010)
whereas
 5 million will be the number of people projected
to
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by
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 2030.
Conversely
, the use of
bus
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the bus
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 has been
drooping
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dropping
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 since 1970 with 4
millions
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million
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 users to 3
millions
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million
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.
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