The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar charts illustrate information about the proportion of
money
that families spent weekly income on their expenditures in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest percentages in 1968 were spent on
food
,
while
the lowest percentages in 2018 were spent on Fuel and power and Personal goods.
Moreover
, spending on household goods in both years was the same proportion. In 1968,
Food
was the largest amount of their spending, which was 35% of their income. The second highest percentages were for housing and clothing and footwear, which were 10 %.
In addition
, the rest of expenditures were spent approximately just under 10% of income, except fuel and power was the lowest proportion that people spent
money
on it around just over 5 % In 2018, people in the city spent
money
on their leisure at almost a quarter, which was the biggest percentage. Housing and
food
were spent almost the same at just under 20% ,which was the most second fundamental expenditure spending ,and spending on
food
was exceeded into
second
Change the article
the second
show examples
rank
instead
of clothing and footwear in 1968.
While
the amount of
money
that people spent on household goods was the same at just under 10 %.
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