Some people today believe that the world increases in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society -Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, there is an ever-increasing of
world
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population
. It is often argued that
this
is a benefit to
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the economy and community whilst others disagree and think it will lead to
global
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the global
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crisis.
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disagress
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disagrees
with having more
population
is beneficial to the world.
Population
growth has made the economy and the community better throughout the years.
This
has allowed companies to research and produce new
technologies
that help with making
life
more convenient. It is
therefore
agreed that the more people there
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, the faster the new
technologies
emerges
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.
For instance
, unreal engine 5 is now equipped with the
capabilities
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of making
graphics
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the graphics
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environment
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realistic which opens
a
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huge possibilities for new ideas in either games or tools for the public.
However
, the
increased
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in
population
has slowly caused more damage than good to
earth
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. The trash that people created consists of decomposable and non-decomposable at a rate where
the
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mother nature cannot keep up and end up being sent into
incinerator
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an incinerator
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while
non-decomposable rubbish
are
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thrown into the ocean, polluting the air leading to unhealthy people and killing marine
lives
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making some part of the sea being uninhabitable, and
this
essay disagrees with
uncontrolled
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population
just for the benefit of ourselves rather than the
life
on earth.
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, the fumes of the burned plastic
is
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able to cause harm to humans
while
plastics that are thrown into the open waters will incapacitate some ocean
life
leading them to death.
While
the benefits of having more
population
, particularly on new
technologies
, allow humans to reach
a
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new heights and
earning
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more money, some feel that
life
on earth is more valuable than being materialistic. But, if we balanced out
on
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both
environment
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and
humans
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growth,
it
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will definitely be able to bring our
technologies
to
a
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new heights without sacrificing other lives that are important to the ecosystem.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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