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the graph betow shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

the graph betow shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
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This
 line graph compares how many visitors travelled to a Caribbean Island from 2010 to 2017, over a period of seven years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the number of visiting tourists increased
signi!cantly
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significantly
 over time. It
also
 can be seen that more people preferred to stay on cruise ships over the time frame. In 2010, one
million
 tourists went to the island
who
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and
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 two-quarter of them stayed on the land,
while
 a quarter remained on the ships. The total number of visitors rose steadily over the next 6 years, reaching more than 2.5
million
 in 2015, and it
then
 levelled
o'
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off
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 for one year before surging to a peak of 3.5
million
 in the !nal year. The number of people who liked to be on the land, after being steady for the !
rst
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first
 year, gently grew to 1.5
million
 in 2013. Apart from a small fall in 2015, it again came back to
this
 level in 2017.
On the other hand
, staying on the ships became more attractive
tovisitors
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to visitors
, and with an exception of a gentle drop from 2011 to 2012,the rates remarkably went up until to overtook
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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