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Some people think that in the morden world we are more dependent on each other. Others argue that people have become more independent. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #morden #world
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Osama, Thank you for updating me, just keep in mind we do not take the instruction from Mohammed Majid, and I use YTT when I feel its necessary for the trainees,
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 as taking the attendance, handout the P&ID, equipment specifications copy for every single trainee and the act of mapping out one’s daily activities before going to the field.
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I used
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 when it was necessary to use it, especially for stage 2, I used extensive Graphics and Animation with Computer Based Training (CBT) and Web/Cloud Training (WBT), these were very important to show the mechanism of machinery and internal components with a 3D view, so I use these software programs for essential machinery, as you know it's not allowed to us to touch/turn off or open the equipment, so these software
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 very useful for the trainees. Best regard,
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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