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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals think that
professionals
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, namely
doctors
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 and
engineers
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, should be compulsory for them to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they did their training. Others feel they should have
freedom
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the freedom
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 to
work
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 in any
country
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 they
wants
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. In my opinion,
professionals
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allows
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allow
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to
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working
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work
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 in any
places
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place
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 they want , because it boosts
principle
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the principle
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 of
fair
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fairness
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 and
make
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 sure they
happiness
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about
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in
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 their occupations. On the one hand, some believe
the
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that
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professionals
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such
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 as
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 should be
obligatory
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 to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they did their training for them in order to give back to society. To illustrate ,the
country
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who
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that
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provide
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provides
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 training for
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 was spend a considerable amount of money
as well as
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 time in order to train the
professionals
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.
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, the
professionals
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such
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,
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doctors
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 and
engineers
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 should
work
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 for
period
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 in order to enhance the healthcare and engineering sectors in the
country
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who
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where
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their
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they
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 did their training,
specially
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 in underdeveloped nations, because these
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country
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countries
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struggle
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struggles
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 with
lack
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a lack
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 of
professionals
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.
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, I would like to agree with those who believe that
professionals
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allows
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allow
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to
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working
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work
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country
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Firstly
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,
force
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forcing
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professionals
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 to
work
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place
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a place
the place
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 they did their training is considered unfair.
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 is because it
restrict
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restricts
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 the
freeddom
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freedom
freedoms
 of employees, and it
against
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is against
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the
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apply
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humans
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 rights.
Secondly
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, if the
the
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place of
tranining
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training
 force their trainees to
work
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 in the same places of their training
this
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 can leads to decrease the productivity of
emoloyees
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employees
.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact
the
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that
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, the employees will become unsatisfied
about
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 their jobs and do not
work
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 from
heart
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.
As a result
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,
this
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 can have
a negative impacts
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a negative impact
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in
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on
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quality
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the quality
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 of services the
professionals
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 will provide.
To sum up
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, In my perspective,
professionals
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,
such
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 as
doctors
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engineers
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freedom
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the freedom
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 to
work
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 in any
places
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place
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, because is
fairness
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as well as
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ensuraing
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ensuring
 the
professionals
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 will become
contented
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content
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about
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with
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 their jobs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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