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write a email to the resturant manager for bad experience you had in the resturant

#email #resturant #manager
Dear Manager, My Name is Nikole, I’m writing
this
 email regarding dissatisfaction which
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 had in your esteemed organization
last
 week.
Firstly
, I ordered the soup. The soup was unbearable because it was too cold and the vegetables they used in the soup seemed like they were not properly
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.and the salad was stale. We were not able to eat a single byte.
Secondly
, The customer service was unprofessional.I made the reservation before coming even though
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 have to wait 30 min in
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line.and
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 they are watching a football match
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busy hours
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 is unethical. To rectify my solution; please provide the proper training to your employees so
this
 will not happen again with any customer.
However
, sorry if I hurt anyone's feelings.
This
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 honest customer. Best Regard, Nikole
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