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Unemployment has become an increasing problem in the recent past. what factors contribute to an increase in unemployement and what steps can be taken to solve this problem?

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The rate of people becoming jobless has increased in recent times. The dilemma has impacted both developing and developed
countries
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 crippling their economies. There are many implications to the current situation which can be resolved through a systematic approach. The global recession is the main contributor to the current status.
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due to
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 reason many of the blue chip companies have
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 investing
on
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 expanding their businesses
due to
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 the higher risk of return on investment. For
an
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example, Facebook restructured the company's business model by laying off twenty per cent of the company to combat the downturn.
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, developing
countries
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 are struggling to keep up their economy stable and resulting in restructuring their domestic debt which, has
resulted
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 many companies shutting down for higher operational costs. Creating a sustainable environment for job creation is the key to
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this
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 issue.
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 government should encourage business owners to create more jobs by, giving them exemptions in
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 and
faster
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a faster
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 process to complete the registration of businesses.
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, having a national policy in Human capital development will ensure potential people are trained on the skills which are
on
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 high demand. For
an
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example, these trained people can be utilized to
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 abroad to fill the demand
jobs
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for jobs
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 in other
countries
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. In conclusion,
it is clear that
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 the current global crisis has impacted many companies to restructure their businesses leaving thousands without jobs. A solution for
this
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 can be only approached by having a national policy internally in the
countries
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.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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