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In recent years, many local shop owners have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

#years #shop #owners #customers #travel #centers #malls #development
As
people
 are choosing to
by
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buy
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goods
 from shopping
centres
 or
malls
 because
thre
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they
 gets
quit
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quite
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 low rate
goods
 from there.
This
have
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 both effect good and bad. As large shopping
centres
 or
malls
 are been developed so more
people
 are getting
a jobs
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a job
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. Shopping from places like D-mart, Jio mart and many more a public gets a great discount from
this
.
Nowdayas
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Nowadays
, there is a trend of purchasing products from big places.
Mall
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 needs a large number of workers to work in it and run it and manger it so, by
this
ways
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way
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 lot many
people
 will get employment. As mall
goods
 and
service
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services
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 are
on
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at
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 discounted rates poor
people
 will
also
 be able to
affort
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afford
 to go
on
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to
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malls
. There are so many positive sides
of
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to
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 big
centres
.
Due to
 large ,
malls
 poor
people
is
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are
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 getting facilities
in
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at
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 low price. There are even negative sides
of
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to
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 the opening of big shopping
centres
 or
malls
 like many
shop
keeper
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keepers
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 have to close
there
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their
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 shops and need to find
there
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their
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job
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jobs
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 or
works
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work
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, which leads to unemployment. Local
shop
keeper
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keepers
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 are not getting more profits as
a
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apply
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big businessmen are getting.
Due to
 shopping
centers
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centres
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 small or local
shop
 is not able to get high profits compare to the past. Small or local
shop
keeper
 should
asks
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ask
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 for
loan
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loans
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 from governments. As large shopping
centers
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centres
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 or
malls
 are getting great profits should help small or local
shop
keeper
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keepers
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.
Goverments
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Governments
 should help local
shop
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shops
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 and provide
a loans
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a loan
loans
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 if there are in need of it. Governments should
also
 spot
malls
 because they are providing
goods
in
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at
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 high discounts or in low prices.
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