In recent years, many local shop owners have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

As
people
are choosing to
by
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buy
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goods
from shopping
centres
or
malls
because
thre
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they
gets
quit
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quite
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low rate
goods
from there.
This
have
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both effect good and bad. As large shopping
centres
or
malls
are been developed so more
people
are getting
a jobs
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a job
jobs
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. Shopping from places like D-mart, Jio mart and many more a public gets a great discount from
this
.
Nowdayas
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Nowadays
, there is a trend of purchasing products from big places.
Mall
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needs a large number of workers to work in it and run it and manger it so, by
this
ways
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way
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lot many
people
will get employment. As mall
goods
and
service
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services
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are
on
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discounted rates poor
people
will
also
be able to
affort
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afford
to go
on
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to
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malls
. There are so many positive sides
of
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to
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big
centres
.
Due to
large ,
malls
poor
people
is
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are
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getting facilities
in
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at
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low price. There are even negative sides
of
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to
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the opening of big shopping
centres
or
malls
like many
shop
keeper
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keepers
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have to close
there
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their
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shops and need to find
there
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their
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job
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jobs
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or
works
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work
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, which leads to unemployment. Local
shop
keeper
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keepers
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are not getting more profits as
a
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apply
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big businessmen are getting.
Due to
shopping
centers
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centres
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small or local
shop
is not able to get high profits compare to the past. Small or local
shop
keeper
should
asks
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for
loan
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loans
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from governments. As large shopping
centers
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centres
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or
malls
are getting great profits should help small or local
shop
keeper
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keepers
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.
Goverments
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Governments
should help local
shop
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shops
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and provide
a loans
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a loan
loans
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if there are in need of it. Governments should
also
spot
malls
because they are providing
goods
in
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at
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high discounts or in low prices.
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