Nowadaya both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care. this was not so in past. what may be the root cause of this behaviour? discuss the reasons and possible results.

In past, time only
female
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females
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were using
beauty
care
but
now a days
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nowadays
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,
male
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males
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are
also
using
beauty
care
which leads to
waste
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a waste
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of money.
Male
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Males
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are
also
spending large
amount
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amounts
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of money
in
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on
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beauty
a
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apply
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products
.
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have
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both effects good and bad.
Firstly
, There are positive results of using makeup
is
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as
people
do makeup they can hide their dark
skin
. As
people
will buy more
products
than
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apply
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a company needed to
produses
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produce
produces
more and more production which helps
a
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apply
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people
to get employment. As the country will do high production
then
they can even export it
also
.
For example
,
it
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if
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a lady will go to
salon
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the salon
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and will do makeup
then
people
will get employment. There are so many
products
are there which are good for
body
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the body
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which
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and
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can make
people
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people's
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body
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bodies
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soft. There are some
lotion
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lotions
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which can
reduses
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reduce
reduces
dry
skin
. As women will look beautiful it will give
her
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them
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power and will make
her
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them
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good-looking.
Secondly
, there
are
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is
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os
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so
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many side effects of using
skin
care
productes
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products
such
as it
damage
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damages
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the
skin
. It
hide
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hides
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the real
skin
of a person. As men and women will spend more income
in
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on
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buying
a
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apply
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skincare
iteams
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items
will make unbalance in purchasing power. For ,example if a girl or boy will use
beauty
care
sinces
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since
,
thier
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their
childhood
then
there
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their
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skin
will be damaged by
there
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their
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old age and will make
its
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their
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body
black. In conclusion, some
skin
products
are good for
body
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the body
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but, not all. Government should increase
tax
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taxes
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on those items which harm
people
. Everybody
,
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should set
limit
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a limit
the limit
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for their own on using it. The public should use good and
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healthy
heathly
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healthy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Societal pressure
  • Media influence
  • Unrealistic beauty standards
  • Technological advancements
  • Disposable income
  • Homogenous beauty ideal
  • Globalization
  • Cosmetic trends
  • Psychological impact
  • Self-esteem
  • Social status
  • Beauty care
  • Personal appearance
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