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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The given diagram shows the
process
 of making chocolate. In general, there are ten stages in
this
process
, embarking with the harvesting
process
 and culminating with the making of liquid products.
Initially
, the ripe cocoas are harvested by farmers in countries like South America, Africa, and Indonesia. Later on, the white cocoa
beans
 are separated from the pods before they are fermented for some time.
In addition
, the fermented
process
 will let the liquid substance dry with the help of sunlight. In the following step, the dried
beans
 of cocoa are packed and sealed into large bags, and
then
 distributed to the factory by train or truck. The next
process
 is conducted in the factory,
such
 as the roasting of liquid chocolate production. In the roasting
process
, all the
beans
 are heated at the temperature of 300 degrees Celsius to allow the shells or the outer parts to release. Ultimately, the inner parts of cocoa
beans
 are pressed using a machine in order to create the liquid form of chocolate.
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