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The given graph depicts the average figure of British citizens used to travel everyday by car,bus or train from 1970 to 2030.

The given graph depicts the average figure of British citizens used to travel everyday by car,bus or train from 1970 to 2030.
The given graph depicts the average figure of British citizens
used
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who used
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 to travel
everyday
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every day
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 by
car
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,
bus
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 or
train
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 from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
Uk
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traveler
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traveller
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 commuting by
car
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 and
train
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 have had an upward trend ,
while
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 the
number
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 of
Uk
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people
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traveling
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travelling
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 by
bus
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 has had a downward trend . In 1970, the average
number
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 of
Uk
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 citizens
traveling
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travelling
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 by
car
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 and
train
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 was 5 and 2
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millions
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million
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, it has
leveled
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levelled
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 out at 7 and 4
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million
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millions
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 in 2023.The
number
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 of British
people
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traveling
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travelling
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 by
car
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 and
train
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 has increased to 2
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millions
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million
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 each after 2023.From 1970 to 2023 ,many
people
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 saw the
number
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 of
UK
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 commuters
traveling
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travelling
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 by
bus
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has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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drop
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dropped
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 significantly ,it has declined from 4 to over
millions
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. By 2030 the
number
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 of
people
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 who
traveling
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travel
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 by
car
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 is expected to reach 9
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millions
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million
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 and it is predicted that the
number
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 of
train
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user
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users
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 will increase to nearly 5
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millions
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million
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.
By contrast
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 , the
number
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 of
bus
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user
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users
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 is predicted to decrease to 3
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millions
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million
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, number, uk, people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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