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You are a member of a sports centre and you have noticed a problem which has not been fixed for some time. Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter tell the manager about the problem explain how this issue is affecting your experience at the gym tell the manager what you would like to happen

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a member of your sports centre, and I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with some of the facilities in your centre. I live very nearby to your centre and I visit the gym most evenings. I like all the facilities you have provided
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 I feel that the gym has only a few appliances.
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 has been quite annoying for me as I prefer exercising using various machines, and it is
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 more effective than doing the same exercises. I have noticed that you have put up a banner in the front saying that you will add more machines and weight in the coming days, but it has been over a year now, and I still did not notice any upgrades or new machines. I believe sooner or later a lot of customers will feel the same. So, I would like to suggest speeding up and installing the new appliances as soon as possible. It will be very convenient for us once we have all the modern facilities, and it might soon attract many customers. So, please do the needful ,and I hope that
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 message finds you well. Yours faithfully, Ana.
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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