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Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child development. However, others argue that other things like Television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Few individuals believe that
parents
 have the most significant role in
child's
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a child's
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 development
whereas
other
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others
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 opine
thatfriends
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that friends
 and
Televisio
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television
 are more important.
This
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intend
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 to analyze both
the
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views
along with
 my perspective. There are several reasons why
parents
 have the most critical role in
child's
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a child's
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 development.
Firstly
,
children
 spend most of
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their
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time with
parents
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their parents
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. To explain it more,
parents
 give proper knowledge to their
children
 because
children
 easily
understanding
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 them. If
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parents
not
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 give proper
guiaadence
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guidance
 to their
childern
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children
, they will see bad results in future
such
 as smoking, doing illegal activities, and joining
in
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criminal gangs.
For instance
, in Hinduism, people do not prefer to eat
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 because they are taught from childhood that it is against our religion.
As a result
, most
of
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children
 live a peaceful and great life in future
due to
 having knowledge given by guardians.
On the other hand
, those who say that friends and TV
have
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are
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 more important for
child's
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a child's
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develpment
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development
. The first and foremost reason is that
by
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living or spending time with
friend
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friends
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 helps to improve
children
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children's
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 confidence
,
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 and
improve
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communication skills.
In addition
 to
this
, by watching television
children
 learn
lot
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 of things
such
as
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if they watch a yoga program on
tv
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TV
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,
he
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they
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 will be
intrested
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interested
 in the future for yoga classes.
Parents
 should have details of their
childern
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children
children's
 friends, because
few
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a few
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 masses choose a bad path in their life and it
is affected
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affects
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to
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our
children
. In conclusion, in my opinion,
parents
are playing
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 a vital role in the development of their
children
 in comparison to friends and television. I believe that it is completely
depend
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depends
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 on
children
at
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where they influenced more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary educators
  • role models
  • emotional support
  • psychological development
  • expose to new ideas
  • broaden horizons
  • social skills
  • sense of belonging
  • identity formation
  • regulate content
  • mitigating potential negative impacts
  • important life skills
  • negotiation
  • empathy
  • conflict resolution
  • quality of the relationship
  • lasting impact
  • self-esteem
  • mental health
  • educational programs
  • supplement school education
  • additional learning opportunities
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