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today, more school leavers are unable to find jobs. discuss the causes of rising unemployment among young adults and suggest any solutions.

#school #leavers #jobs #unemployment #adults
It is common that
school
 graduates are difficult to get
job
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a job
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 and it will increase
an
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unemployment rates. I strongly believe in
this
 phenomenon where the
government
 and industrial sectors should make a good relationship to tackle
this
issues
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.
To begin
 with,
Government
 should take their responsibility to make sure their
people
 can access higher education. Because once they graduated from higher education there will be many options to get a better
job
. If
people
 only graduated from
a
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high
school
, their skills
still
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 limited and many industries
as well as
bussiness
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business
businesses
 tend to see
people
 who have certain skills and capacities to
work
 with.
For example
,
a
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start-up companies
are prefer
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 to have
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an employer
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employer
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employers
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 that mastering
in
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computer science so they can
work
 straight away rather than working with
people
 who only have a
school
 degree.
Hence
, I believe that the more education
the
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people
 have, the more
chooices
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choices
 will be open
for
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 them.
This
also
 will have them
to
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increase their quality of life if they have a good
job
 with a good income.
Moreover
, a strong collaboration between companies and
government
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the government
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 should be made in ensuring that young adults will not leave behind.
This
 can be made by providing more
job
exhibition
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exhibitions
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 and
share
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 the information widely so
people
 who want to
work
 straight away after they finish
school
 can access
this
 information.
Government
 and industrial sectors
also
 can
work
 together in providing
trainings
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 to encourage them to make their own
bussiness
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businesses
.
This
 can
benefiting
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 not only the country because their income will increase
due to
 many young
people
are
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currently working as
an
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enterpreneur
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entrepreneur
, but
also
 these young adults can have their own income and provide
a
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job
 opportunities for others. To
be conclude
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,
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the govenrment
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govenrment
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government
 and business sectors should have a synergy in making sure that
people
 will be absorbed in
job
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 field or making them able to be
enterpreneur
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entrepreneur
entrepreneurs
 that can provide
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 for
the
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others.
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