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If students were given the choice between ‘not to study’ and ‘study most of the time’, they would choose ‘not to study’. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

#students #choice #‘not #study’ #‘study #time’ #support
Once pupils were awarded to opt to
focus
 on studying at times or not to
focus
 on studying.
This
 is more likely to
they
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apply
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decide to do not
study
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to study
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. In my opinion,
due to
 having no future with high
educations
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education
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,
students
 find other activities more attractive than studying. It is my view that pupils would decide to not
study
 since it is an undeniable fact that nowadays numerous young people could develop remarkable
skills
 without just studying hard.
Therefore
, they
focus
 on other activities and prefer to
be not excel
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 in just one subject. They want to have something to say in different areas which is extremely good because that would help their personal development and social
skills
 as well.
In addition
, undoubtedly, they were exposed to a wide variety of situations which is great, as every experience can have at least one valuable lesson.
Thus
, they are more prepared for their future life.
In contrast
, some
students
 may opt to
study
 from time to time.
However
, I do not find
this
 argument convincing as pupils have to be involved in studying. Definitely because
,
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 education is compulsory and there is
examination
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an examination
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 system in schools. It seems to me that, those
students
 who choose to
focus
 on studying still think that it is essential for every adult to have a strong
credential
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 to become succeed.
Although
 holding a university degree is a minimum requirement for many high-paying jobs, interpersonal
skills
 are really concerned. In conclusion, I completely agree with the choice of
students
to
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not to
study
 if they had a chance to choose because they could use their time efficiently to acquire interpersonal
skills
 which
is
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acted as a deterrent
by
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to
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abolished
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the abolished
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 education system. Indeed,
this
 opportunity would help them to pursue a career and having a lucrative career can bring a sense of satisfaction for them too.
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