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Human activities have a negative effect on plant and animal species. Some people say that it is too late to do anything. Some people think that we should take effective action to improve the situation. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

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Some
people
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 believe
if
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that
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 human activities have negative impacts on the
planet
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 and
people
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 are running out of time to save them.
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the
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others
arguing
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argue
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 that
people
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 should take action to save the
planet
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. I strongly believe that we should do something to keep our
planet
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earth
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Earth
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sustain
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 to be lived in until the future generations. By stating there is no time left for improving
current
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the current
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 environmental condition, it means that we are giving up
with
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 the situation and it would not help our
planet
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. There are many ways to make our contribution to
save
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saving
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 the
planet
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. It can be started
from
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by
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 ourselves,
for
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example
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 we can change our lifestyle by
practicing
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practising
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 reduce, reuse and recycle ideas.
People
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 do not need to buy new clothes if they do not really need
it
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them
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 as it can save
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clothing waste.
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, it can reduce the amount of land and underground water pollution which in turn can help
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the animal
an animal
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animal
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animals
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 to live
healthy
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healthily
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as well as
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 plants to grow.
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, the technology inventions help
people
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 to take progressive actions in improving the situation of the
planet
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. These inventions can be seen
from
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by
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 switching from
a
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dirty energy consumption by using solar
panel
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panels
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 or wind
generator
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generators
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 to produce more clean energy. Another example is
chosing
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choosing
 public transportation rather than our private vehicle
also
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 important to reduce
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pollution and the use of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 that can help the environment
healthy
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be healthy
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that taking a small step to save our
planet
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 and its contents
such
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animals
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as animals
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, plants and
human
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humans
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, is still positive compared
of
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to
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 doing nothing.
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