Write about the following topic. In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Schools should prepare children for their
future
at any workplace they choose but are currently not reflecting the realities of work life. Early job experiences and trying out different professions can help to achieve
this
goal.
While
schools are trying to give insights
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the world of work, their current methods are lacking.
This
could be greatly improved by changing the curriculum
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a
four day
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school week and one day at a chosen profession.
This
could aid students
having
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a glimpse into what is waiting for them, and
also
soften the change from student to worker, as teachers and
employeers
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employers
employees
are very different. Moreso, a realistic view
on
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different work routines in a company could help them make decisions regarding their
future
.
In addition
to workdays once a week, schools should offer different professions to try out. Experiencing workplaces they did not consider, students can make a more nuanced decision about their
future
, which is vital for choosing a profession and a company that meets an
individuals
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standards of a good workplace. Including different professions could
also
help in the process of choosing the job field they want to be in the
future
, they did not consider at first. There are many jobs that are simply chosen, because they are familiar, even though other prospects would be better suited.
Lastly
, different environments could show unknown
strenghts
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strengths
and weaknesses,
further
helping
choosing
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their
future
path. Implementing these changes may be a great undertaking, but it would benefit children changing from students to workers and employees.
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