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The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs depict the proportion of the five
factors
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 that make
people
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 happy, which are divided into two
categories
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,
people
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 under 30 and
people
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 over 30. In general, there are differences in
factors
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 between age group
categories
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, and three out of five
factors
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 are the same. Regarding
people
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 under 30, achievement at work is the most popular at 31%, followed by doing hobbies at 22% in the second position. Having a good appearance,
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, and other
factors
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 account for around half of the highest amount, approximately. Turning to
people
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 over 30, achievement at work and doing hobbies show a similar position and amount compared with
people
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 under 30 as the top two;
however
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, there are differences in
factors
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 compared with others,
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 as financial security and being with family, which are presented in these
categories
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 at 20% and 14%, respectively.
In addition
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, other
factors
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 in both
categories
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 are present in similar proportions around 10s.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words factors, people, categories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • age groups
  • responses
  • happiness factors
  • participants
  • contribute
  • compare
  • patterns
  • differences
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