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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps detail the development progress of a Meadowside village and a
neighboring
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 town Fonton over three different time periods 1962, 1985, and the present scenario. Looking from the
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
both
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the
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towns
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 have expanded significantly over time resulting in easy access, improved infrastructure, and a better lifestyle.
According to
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 the given illustration, in 1962
both
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 the places were underdeveloped.
Although
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 Meadowside
village
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 and Fonton
was
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 equipped with an unpaved road and a railway track respectively, there was no connectivity between the two
towns
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.
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, after nearly two decades,
both
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the
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towns
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 underwent significant renovations. The reconstructed main road in the village got extended all the way to the
neighboring
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 town.
In addition
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, enormous modernization led to the construction of
housing
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a housing
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estate
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along with
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leisure
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a leisure
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 complex to the west and a
super-store
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 to the south of the main road. In the current times, Meadowside suburbs have emerged after the merging of
both
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the
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towns
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. The installation of a new station at the middle joint has resulted in
extended
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an extended
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 track to
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Fonton town. Just beside the station, a new hotel has been built, where people stay
while
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traveling
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 between the
towns
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. To the south of the station, the running highway crosses through the newly constructed business park.
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